Self Introduction (edited 300920)

 

Subject: Self-introduction

Dear Professor Blackstone,

 

My name is Donovan Chan and I am writing this to introduce myself as a student attending your effective communication module. I am a year 1 engineering student studying Sustainable Infrastructure Engineer Building Services in Singapore Institute of Technology (SIT).

 

I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic in 2018 with a diploma in Aerospace Technology. From young, I had always been interested in engineering and on how things work, particularly on cars and aircraft. In my free time, I would usually do my research in the powetrain system of a car. To be specific, the engine. During my Polytechnic days, I managed to gain hands-on experience during my internship at one of the Aerospace companies. I got to open up and learn the insides of a fuel pump from an aircraft. I find it very intriguing and this is the reason why I still chose the world of engineering.

 

My weakness is in verbal communication. At times, I would reply with the first thought that comes into my mind that is sometimes rude and disrespectful. With this, sometimes I do not allow the speaker to complete his or her sentence before giving a reply. One such situation that occurred was during my National Service (NS) where I was given a few options related to work, I did not listen to all options and chose the first one where I thought it was best. This is surely something I need to work on.

 

My strength in communication is being able to speak in front of a group of people. It was hard at first but after many sessions of presenting and talking in front of a group, I learned to speak loudly and not rush to complete the presentation or speech. A situation that occurred would be during my internship, where I had to brief a group of technicians on a new system that me and my superior came up with.

 

One thing that differentiates me from the rest is when I find interest in something I do, I will do my own research and self-study on it, as I believe if one has an interest in what they like to do, they would want to gain more knowledge by themself and do better.

 

My goal for this module is to be able to speak with confidence to a bigger group of people and to be able to write e-mails and letters with the correct format and improving my vocabulary and grammar.

 

Best Regards,

Donovan Chan

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        Revised as of 30/9/20, 2040Hrs.

        Read: Dennis, Bryan

Comments

  1. Brad BlackstoneSeptember 18, 2020 at 9:48 PM

    Thanks, Don, for this letter. I look forward to reading comments from your peer readers, and then I'll comment.

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  2. Dennis ChanSeptember 20, 2020 at 4:59 AM

    Dear Donovan,

    Thanks for this insightful letter which helped me learn more about yourself. I had a great time reading your introduction letter.

    The content for your letter is sufficient. Your strengths and weaknesses are clear and backed up with evidence. I am enlightened by your second paragraph, telling me why you still chose engineering over other careers. I feel it would have been better if you explain how your interest in engineering started, I believe this will give your reader more insight on your interest in engineering. I think you might have forgotten to explain to us on "what differentiates you from others.", the last question of the assignment.

    The flow of the whole letter is smooth. Every paragraph accurately answers the individual questions of the assignment. I find it unique for you to start off with telling me your weakness first and then your strength.

    In conclusion, this letter was a joy to read. I hope my comments on your letter are able to enlighten you on the things you need to work on.

    Best regards,
    Dennis Chan

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    1. Donovan ChanSeptember 23, 2020 at 9:34 AM

      Hi Dennis,

      Thank you for your comment. Thank you for reminding me on the last part on "what differentiates you from others". I will get that added in.

      Regards,
      Donovan

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  3. Bryan WongSeptember 23, 2020 at 7:39 AM

    Dear Donovan,

    Thank you for this introduction.

    I feel that the content of your letter is sufficient and you have covered most of the required scopes except for the part where you are suppose to explain "what differentiates you from others". I liked how you mentioned that your interest in engineering developed since you were young and the hands-on experience during your internship, however, I believe that it would be better if you could elaborate more on it. Your weakness and strength are very clear and well justified with the situations from your National service and internship days, I can somehow relate to this as well.

    The letter is very well organized and there is a good flow to it. I liked how you use each paragraph to answer for each required scope.

    All in all, I have enjoyed reading this letter and I really felt that I got to know you better after reading it. I hope that my pointers can help you to improve on your future writings and I look forward to reading more letters from you.

    Regards,
    Bryan Wong

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    1. Donovan ChanSeptember 23, 2020 at 9:40 AM

      Hi Bryan,

      Thank you for commenting and pointing out on the question where I missed out on. I will get that done. As much as I would like to elaborate more on my interest in engineering but sadly, I've reached my word capacity. Nonetheless, thank you for informing me that I should've elaborated more on it.

      Regards,
      Donovan

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  4. Brad BlackstoneSeptember 27, 2020 at 1:46 AM

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  5. Brad BlackstoneSeptember 27, 2020 at 1:47 AM

    Dear Donovan,

    Thanks much for this generally clear, concise and yet detailed letter. As your classmates have said, because you develop your ideas fairly well, we learn a lot about you. At the same time, in a few spots, if you would add a sentence of explanation, the letter would take on added life. For example, you mention that you like to do your own research when you have an interest in something. What might an example of that be?

    In terms of language use, this is a good effort, but there are a few areas to take note of:

    1. Caps (see this website: https://wmich.edu/writing/rules/capitalization )

    2. verb tense
    -- I managed to gain hands-on experience during my internship at one of the Aerospace companies. I find it very intriguing and this is the reason why I still chose the world of engineering. > (lack of consistency)

    We hope to hear more from you this term.

    Best wishes,

    Brad

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    1. Donovan ChanSeptember 28, 2020 at 6:00 PM

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    2. Donovan ChanSeptember 28, 2020 at 6:09 PM

      Hi Prof. Brad Blackstone,

      Thank you for your comments and pointing out on the area where I need to ammend. I will take note of the missing information and input them into revised draft.


      Best Regards,
      Donovan Chan

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